Blog Reviews

http://mediawritingbyyasmine.blogspot.com.au/2015/09/week-8-using-pinterest.html#comment-form

https://elvisgonzonotes.wordpress.com/2015/09/15/week-7-practical/comment-page-1/#comment-6

https://laurenalycedigitalmedia.wordpress.com/2015/07/19/different-purposedifferent-writing/comment-page-1/#comment-1

https://tandersoncomm11007.wordpress.com/2015/09/20/week-5-inquiry-find-an-article-that-has-impact-on-you-because-of-the-sources-speech-and-reporting-and-discuss-why-it-is-an-example-of-good-journalism-or-media-writing/comment-page-1/#comment-2

http://mediawritingitj.blogspot.com.au/2015/09/week-three-blog-post-part-one-social.html?showComment=1442929048698

https://zaclalorcqublog.wordpress.com/2015/09/07/week-6-blog-activity-2-press-kit-review/comment-page-1/#comment-7

https://byronkiernan.wordpress.com/2015/09/22/week-10-inquiry-website-review/comment-page-1/#comment-6

https://michellecqu.wordpress.com/2015/09/22/week-8-inquiry-think-about-your-interests/comment-page-1/#comment-1

http://gracetaylormediawriting.blogspot.com.au/2015/09/week-7-blog-activity.html?showComment=1442999495624#c7022508505066364389

https://kaylaskrinnikoff.wordpress.com/2015/07/14/introduction/comment-page-1/#comment-3

https://jordaneedwards.wordpress.com/2015/09/02/10-week-4-practical/comment-page-1/#comment-11

Week 9 Storify Peer Review

When reviewing this Storify Article, it is not apparently clear who this article is aimed at, while it deals with an event that is targeted at people in the middle twenties to late thirties, there is a lot of content that has imagery that is more catered towards children or teenagers, this article is very confusing to me, while on one side there is this more mature and subtle aspect, on the other there is this fluffy, immature and, quite frankly, a little silly theme. Perhaps it could be aimed at the entire family, but i feel that they have missed that mark somewhat.

During this article, the author goes on to mention that it is an event to signify the end of Mackay's $18.6 million "center piece of the city" city rejuvenation campaign.while this article informs me of why the city of Mackay did this, it did little explanation of what they did or why they did it.

If I were to try and make this article, I'm not too sure of what I would do different. Trying to cover an all ages/family event is very difficult to do and it becomes even harder when the event itself is not well targeted, I feel that the author, given the difficulties, made what they had work.

However, my own personal opinions aside for a moment, this article is exceptionally well written considering that the event seemed a touch on the lackluster side, in terms of attendee engagement, the story was written fabulously with lots of detail while still being easy to read and simple to comprehend.







ARTICLE:
https://storify.com/Heidi_Petith/twilight-street-party-a-bittersweet-celebration

Week 8 Tech Review

The Linus Tech Tips Forum was originally made by a team of technology and computer review persons from YouTube, as a means of communicating with a small group of likeminded individuals who share the same interest, Technology.

A few short years later and that small group of likeminded people has grown into hundreds and thousands of unique users who are all fans of the YouTube channel and also users who can also be very knowledgeable in computers and other forms of tech.

In terms of lay out, the Linus Tech Tips Forum is very similar to a large portion of other forum websites. Each section of the site is broken up into Threads. These threads are the first thing that the user will see upon entering the site. It holds topics such as ‘General Discussion’, ‘Forum News’, ‘Troubleshooting’ and a few other pages. The ‘General Discussion’ Thread is filled with various posts on a wide range of topics related to just technology and computers (they do provide an ‘Off Topic’ thread also for those of you who don’t want to talk tech all day) The ‘Forum News’ thread is all about new things coming to the forums or actual tech news stories sourced from various places around the internet. While the ‘Troubleshooting’ thread is all about users helping each other with their own computer problems or other tech related issues.

One thing that the Linus Tech Tips Forum has that many other online forums don’t have, is the community, the sense of camaraderie on this site is immense, everyone is treated as a friend or colleague and even if you have a computer issue that you personally don’t know how to fix, generally speaking the users on the forum will be able to help, no matter what level of computer skill you may or may not have, even if your problem is a program crashing on your laptop or an entire server not accepting your RJ45 ethernet cable into your new fancy networking switch, the community is always there to listen and to help in any way they can.

In conclusion, If you are looking for a Technology themed community and would like to further your prowess in the field, then the Linus Tech Tips Forum is the right place, Sign up is Free, after that, you then become a part of this ever growing community of like-minded folk who have had the same idea.

Week 7 Assessment 1

When looking at what I am going to submit for Assessment 1 subjectively, it becomes clear that in the submission, I found that there were maybe a few breaks in the flow of the Press Release. such breaks made the release rather jarring to read as it would go into the proper style of writing, but in the middle of  a sentence or the middle of a point, the piece would change styles to a more academic style of writing which would have completely thrown off the reader and may convey a different message than the one intended. I also found that i kept dropping in and out of Past and Present tenses, this was a serious issue that was quickly addressed and fixed.
However, on the whole there were not too many issues that I had found, perhaps two or three different problems within the Press Release with these issues that I have now fixed through simple grammatical changes.
Honestly, having a checklist was not the best thing for me, instead of having a list of things that I need to do, I find it easier to just go through the entire piece and fix what needs fixing and repeat that method a few times as needed. I know its in-efficient, but it works for me.
In terms of my final result, I'm really not too worried about the whole thing, I have done what i have done, it seems to make sense and it also seems to make my point. Realistically, i'll take what I'm given, I do not know enough to make judgement about what I think I should have, so, I'll leave it in the hands of the people who mark the assessments.